It seems like narrative poetry, plain and simple. If you'd like to up the literary merit, I'd say rework it and try a complex rhyme and beat. It takes real skill to get your point across and fit into the given rules of a style. Also, it seems lacking in symbolism. It doesn't have to be outright nonsense, but use words that you might not normally. They may fit AND carry a specific connotation to enhance your meaning. Also, try adding in some alliteration or atrophy. Don't saturate it with rhetorical strategies, but add some. If anything, it'll get you in a more creative mindset just trying to find ways around the restrictions!
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